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Goodbye, Your Majesties by phasingirl Goodbye, Your Majesties by phasingirl
DISCLAIMER: I am horrible at humans. :iconbowplz:

So I guess this description cloud be spoilerish if you haven't read my book and are planning to, but this scene takes place really close to the beginning. Um. So. Read at your own risk?

This is Briac as I have always pictured him after having to say goodbye to the girls. While we don't get a lot of time to get to know Briac in the story, in my head he has quite a story behind him, and in that story he has such a deep love for Kenayde and Ashlynn, like that of a father to his daughters. Having to send them both off into the unknown while staying behind to protect them, knowingly sacrificing himself to keep them safe, broke his heart. I imagine him kissing his hand before touching his fingers to the stone alter under which he shut them away.

As I said, I'm not good with humans and I am REALLY not good with human emotions so this was the best I could do. I just really wanted to try drawing him as I pictured him in my head. The blue fragmented light comes both from the torch fyre, in case you were wondering. Aaaaaand I guess that's it.

Curious about this scene, this character, or the book itself? You can buy it here and now is the best time to do it; book two in the series is coming out next month!
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Portmeirion Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2016  Student Writer
That was one of my favorite scenes! I actually found it more intense and gripping than sad, but this image really succeeds in bringing out the inherent emotional depth of Briac's role in the narrative.
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phasingirl Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2016  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
It was definitely meant to be read that way since it was from the girls' perspective. In earlier versions, before I cut out all the head hopping, the scene continued after the girls left to show Briac after they had gone and it was always a very sad moment for me. In the end I am glad it was taken out, but it still makes me a bit sad no one else gets to know Briac as I got to.

Also, thank you!
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aedificatoris Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2016  Student General Artist
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Methinks you and I have very different definitions of the term "Horrible".  In my view, it is a term that should in no circumstances be applied to any aspect of this piece.  If you are unwilling to accept "Great", then I will insist on calling it "good", or at least, "very nice".

I think the form and expression are strong; at the very least, even if they are not accurate (it is beyond my ability to determine this; it has been almost a decade since I seriously drew or studied humans,) they are convincing: I feel taken in by the shape and features of the face, and the folds of the fabric feel like they drape in a natural way (one small exception: the way the sleeve fits the arm makes the robe look skin-tight; even as I experiment with holding my own arm up, my sleeve slips down my arm slightly, and the cuff angles downward as much as it can.)  Moreover, the expression succeeds in conveying strong emotion; even before reading the description, I knew this man was either touched by deep sorrow or pain.  Indeed, you did so well with all of this that at first I thought this was an edited photograph, not a drawing.

I find your handling of the beard to be very interesting.  While not necessarily methodically done, the technique you used conveys the idea of rough, random hair surprisingly well.  Also, while the ear and hands are simplified, the complex shapes of both look wonderfully natural.

The areas in which this image is weaker are composition, shading, and color.  As much as I like looking at the folds of the cloth, the face should be the focus; something that I think has been compromised by not showing the top of Briac's head.  Secondly, the fact that his hand and head colors do not match despite their proximity looks rather odd (I assume this was done intentionally?)

Furthermore, I don't dislike the woodgrain-like filter you have applied on the piece, but I also feel like it hurts it as much as it helps; it applies to areas where I don't think it should apply (or more appropriately, it treats all surfaces the same way, but really the effect on his forehead should be much different than the effect on the stonework) and the continuous pattern lessens illusion of depth (basically, the pattern should be much fuzzier on the far wall; that it isn't gives the impression that it is much closer than it appears.) 

Finally, the source of light in this image is a bit odd.  There seem to be two separate sources: a strong one to the left of the image, and a weaker one in front of it (the source of the wood-grain effect.)  However, these two do not seem to be interacting with Briac or each other quite appropriately.  Beyond what I mentioned above, some of the areas lit by the left light source should really be obscured by the cloak (like the back of the neck., (also, I would have liked to have seen some more of the anatomical details portrayed; I think seeing the light rippling pattern pattern of tendons in the hand would have been a subtle, but powerful component that would have made the piece even more appealing.)

I hope you will forgive me if my criticisms come across as harsh, for ultimately,  I think this remains a powerful, well drawn image that I immensely enjoyed seeing, and that you have every right to be pleased with.
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phasingirl Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2016  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I don't mind the critique at all! After all, we cannot improve upon our craft unless we know what we need to work on. Overall, I know I need to take more time with anything I draw. I tend to get impatient with images and give up on them too easily because I want them to just be finished. And that obviously shows. Thank you so much for writing such an in-depth and thought out critique at that. I truly do appreciate it and will take all you have pointed out and suggested into consideration when working on future images.
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